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Another Dream

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Nov 1, 2011
by: kadeemk
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Let me know. Let me show You.
take my hand, understand?
And I'm telling her.
It's what I know. It's what I see.
It's like it seems. It's just another dream.
I think of you. You think of me.
It's like it seems. It's just another dream.

My butterflies have flown away.
It's someone else. I've been replaced.
The jokes on me. Call me a clown.
I should just run away. I couldn't be around.
I'm so confused. What can I really do?
Stuck in my bed. I'm missing school.
You in the spotlight, that means you wasn't low.
You need to tell me now. Baby, just let me know.

Let me know. Let me show you.
Take my hand. Understand.
And I'm telling her,
It's what I know. It's what I see.
It's like it seems. It's just another dream.
I'm calling her. She's calling me.
It's like it seems. It's just another dream.

We were fireflies, shining so bright.
You took that away. That wasn't right.
Never did you wrong. You full of it.
I stood my ground, and cherished it.
Thinking of you, get out my head.
Still missing school, stuck in my bed.
You in the spotlight, that means you wasn't low.
You need to tell me now. Baby, just let me know.

Let me know. Let me show you.
Take my hand. Understand.

Comments

Lovely

Submitted by evelyns on Fri, 2011-11-04 13:15.

Dear Kadeem,

What is this a song or a poem? I really liked it. I liked your post because I can somehow relate to it. I see how you mix it up and show that your talking about "her".

One sentence you wrote that stands out for me is:
"You took that away. That wasn't right.
Never did you wrong. You full of it.
I stood my ground, and cherished it."
This stood out for me because I feel what you saying. I understand that you can have something that makes you feel right and good but they just tend to never last. Some people do you wrong and sometimes its you doing them wrong. I guess its just life.

Another sentence that I liked was:
"I should just run away. I couldn't be around.
I'm so confused. What can I really do?
Stuck in my bed. I'm missing school."
This stood out for me because I kind of went through the same situation. Once that good joy is out of your life you feel hopeless and you don't know what to do. It's like the video of Rihanna "We found Love". You should watch it.

Thanks for your lovely post. I look forward to what you write next.

Its A Song.you could listen

Submitted by kadeemk on Fri, 2011-11-04 13:47.

Its A Song.you could listen to the song above the words.Thank For The Comments.

Amazing

Submitted by justinp on Fri, 2011-11-04 13:59.

Kadeemk bro that was a Great piece of work you put together, 1 Question Did you write this your self?

Dear Kadeem, I see the rhyme

Submitted by michaelg on Mon, 2011-11-07 12:04.

Dear Kadeem,

I see the rhyme you did for this poem "Another Dream" its hot and its something that people would like to keep hearing.

One sentence you wrote that stands out for me is "I should just run away. I couldn't be around.I'm so confused. What can I really do?" is a hot line that makes people think damn i felt the sameway some day.

Another sentence that I viewed and liked was "We were fireflies, shining so bright.You took that away. That wasn't right.Never did you wrong. You full of it.I stood my ground, and cherished it." that hits the good guys that lose the ones they have because of little arguments and bullcrap that people hear and believe.

Your poem reminds me of my ex because even though were not together its still a feeling there but she chose different and people have their own opinions.

Thank you for your writing. Hope to see more of it and keep it up bro.

i like your work that you put

Submitted by danielo on Mon, 2011-11-07 13:22.

i like your work that you put together ..keep up the good work ...did you come up with all of this alone?

HERB

Submitted by kadeemk on Thu, 2011-11-10 14:33.

ITS A SONG....AN I GOT THE BEAT OFF A SEGA WII GAME..

Dear Kadeem I really like

Submitted by antanejaw on Mon, 2011-11-07 14:13.

Dear Kadeem

I really like your poem. But is it a song that's how it sound. This poem/ song really had me touched because I can relate to this all thge way. you gave good examples .

One sentence you wrote that stands out for me is:
"You took that away. That wasn't right.
Never did you wrong. You full of it.
I stood my ground, and cherished it."
This stood out for me because I feel what you saying.

Dear kadeem . Your song i

Submitted by azizar on Thu, 2011-11-10 14:59.

Dear kadeem .
Your song is Hot i rellly like it .I think you should consider making music your career and perfecting your voice . Your post caught my attention because i love to sing and write songs as well. Ive actually posted a video of a hook to a song of mind you should check it out and tell me what you think . I like your hook " let me know.let me show you .take my hand understand. " ,it kind of relates to mine. We should put our heads together and come up a couple fire tracks . Another thing AWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW I didnt know you were like that but then agin every body's human .

-My Niqqa Kadeem Nice On the

Submitted by krystalm on Thu, 2011-11-10 15:47.

-My Niqqa Kadeem Nice On the Voice Thread lol :) Nah but when I read this song it has this rhythm to it as you read along,and after i listened to you sing it, that just made the song even better i enjoyed listening to your song.

Dear Kadeem

Submitted by BECA13_Aislinn on Tue, 2011-11-15 22:07.

One sentence you wrote that stands out to me is " my butterfiles have flown away". I think it is really interesting because you really describe me about what you are dreaming. Also how you use everyday object in the song. Another sentence that was so great was " let me know". This stood out to me because you are letting me know that you are feeling. I do agree with you because you need to let people know how you feel as a person but inside too. Another i agree is because you need to show people that you really have a gift that no one can't take from you. Thank for your writing. i look forward to seeing what you write next because you are an amazing person with great talent. Also i can relate to what you are feeling but i write song too!

Dear Kadeem I liked your

Submitted by qwins on Mon, 2011-11-21 14:53.

Dear Kadeem

I liked your poem "Another Dream" the feeling of it was like a relationship and you wanted the girl to understand how you felt and you cared for her and when you guys were together you treated her like a fool but now u realized what your missing

this quote "The jokes on me. Call me a clown."

I feel like it relates how to alot of people feel about there relationships and when the person they loved left them or they cant be together you sit back and wonder why did you let this happened and now you feel like a fool

this quote "Thinking of you, get out my head"

The quote reminds me of how i feel about my boyfriend when we first met and i never wanted to be without him and he was my other half and if we weren't together today i don't know where i would be and it makes me appreciate him .

you did your thing bro.... 0

Submitted by nancyr on Wed, 2011-11-30 13:00.

Nice ....

HerB

Submitted by jocelynnem on Wed, 2011-11-30 13:21.

Kool

Another dream

Submitted by maryo on Fri, 2012-11-16 12:17.

Your poem, though written in free verse, had a definite rhythm that was derived from its repetition of words or phrases that you wanted to stand out. I like the regular stanza form that you used and how you punctuated your ending by selecting the couplet form. Your feelings came through in your writing and the reader and the speaker were connected by the end of your poem.