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The College Essay: Am I Doing This All Wrong?

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Oct 5, 2009
by: max_L

With deadlines creeping up at me slowly, yet seeming to come faster and faster everyday, I feel much more pressure to finally sit down and write a stellar college essay as if by some miracle that will occur when I sit down at the computer. However, when I look at my possible topics it becomes clear that this is very unlikely to happen. This leads me to wonder, isn't there a better way?

So far, I have merely been brainstorming for events that are important to me, and then asking why they are important in my life. But an article I recently read on www.quintcareers.com brought a different approach to the table:

Have you selected a topic that describes something of personal importance in your life, with which you can use vivid personal experiences as supporting details?
About the College Application Essay

This idea makes much more sense to me. College admissions officers are trying to find out what makes you unique; but if you don't know what makes you unique, how can you know which events exhibit your uniqueness? The experience shouldn't be the topic of your essay. The topic should be an aspect of you, illustrated by the experience. Granted, if you write an essay about an event that had a profound effect on you, this idea will come out (hopefully). But for me, by changing my perspective I was able to focus on specific details of each event that contributed to the development of my values. An event should not be run through like a story you would tell your friends, with a conclusion at the end saying how the event effected you. Instead, every detail should pertain to what you learned. This explicit statement of your values will make an essay much more to the point for an admissions officer who reads many essays every day.

So now I have my event. What's next? Concrete details seem like a good idea to the College Board:


Develop your main idea with vivid and specific facts, events, quotations, examples, and reasons. There's a big difference between simply stating a point of view and letting an idea unfold in the details.
Essay Skills

But it seems that the trick here is to be concise. From the examples provided by the College Board, I get the feeling that obvious aspects don't need details. "I'm a slob" brings up pretty obvious images, but "I'm diverse" does not. Slobs have a general outline, but diversity can take many different forms. The same goes for being passionate, unpredictable or conscientious: backing these up with concrete details would provide a unique image. Another good quote comes from an article I picked up at a college information session at Judge a few nights ago: "The essay has to be about you, and convey your personality... you have to have a sense of yourself. They should also remember that we don't want to read about who you were or what you did back in eighth grade. We want to find out who you are now."

So what does a college essay need? Relevance to your current life, concrete details, events as supporting details that illustrate a personal aspect of yourself, and voice. This is a short and incomplete list, to be sure. But at least it's a start. To all those willing to comment out there, more ideas wouldn't hurt one bit. 

 

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Dear Max,   Lately I have

Submitted by basilvetas on Tue, 2009-10-06 01:11.

Dear Max,

 
Lately I have also been struggling to determine what to write about in my colleges essays. As you described, many of the prompts tell us to write about something "that had a profound effect on you." But a single profound experience isn't going to get you into college either. I liked how you described that "The experience shouldn't be the topic of your essay. The topic should be an aspect of you, illustrated by the experience." I think this is a very good analogy because it's true - colleges want to see why you are unique and why they want you in their school. But, for some reason, I still feel that even accomplishing this in my essay won't be enough. How can an essay which describes only one value or principle I've learned in my life get me some edge on being accepted. Yes, they admissions officers can see how good of a person you are or whatever, but what difference does it make to the school when, as far as top universities go, they surely have thousands of applicants who's essays all portray how great of a person each applicant is. You said, "every detail should pertain to what you learned," and I think you are right in that it really comes down to how well you can articulate and illustrate the fullness of the experience. One thing you didn't address, however, that I have heard from a few different admissions officers is that they want to know why their school is the best fit for you. What makes this university different from any other one, in your perspective. This is where I am really struggling to know what to write my essays about, because besides the fact that specifying each essay to the particular school is going to be a lot more work, I don't know how to do that if I am writing about a lifechanging experience that illustrates one of my values. What really is hard about writing these essays is incoporating each required aspect that is looked for while still making it an intriguing read. So basically, I am just really stressed out with all this on top of school and sports and everything else - as I'm sure you and everyone else are too. Anyways, good luck with your essays... it's just too bad that our society is set up so that instead of allowing people to get the education they really desire, they are limited to certain levels of education by test scores, GPAs, and application essays.

 

Dear Max, I recently wrote a

Submitted by jdonohoe on Tue, 2009-10-06 22:47.

Dear Max,

I recently wrote a post on this exact topic, and I could not agree with you more. The task of writing an essay that exemplifies all your best qualitites, while avoiding sounding pompous and being both concise and entertaining is a daunting one. One good tip I was given by someone I know who was once an admissions counselor is to write a bunch of different essays, no matter how crappy or pointless you think they are. With a wide breadth of essays to choose from, no matter how "rough" they are a rough drafts, it seems to make picking one or two to refine into the "perfect" college essay a much less stressful task. Of course, I suffer from a serious case of what psychologists around the world call "procrastination," so I can only tell you that the previous tip helps in theory.

Best of luck,

Joe

Dear Max, Right now i'm

Submitted by jlee2 on Tue, 2009-10-06 23:32.

Dear Max,

Right now i'm struggling with college essays as well, and the title of your post definitely caught my eye.. I enjoyed reading your post "The College Essay: Am I Doing This All Wrong?" because not only was I relieved to see that I'm not the only one feeling helpless, but it also gave some very useful information about writing the kind of essays that colleges look for.

One sentence you wrote that stands out for me is "College admissions officers are trying to find out what makes you unique; but if you don't know what makes you unique, how can you know which events exihibit your uniqueness?" This made me pause and think a little bit because to be honest, I'm not sure what would make me unique. So far I've been trying to think of some significant event that could be the topic of my essay but now I know that I must know enough about myself in order to write an essay that wins.

it was also helpful to know that a college essay should not be a recap of a story that once happened in your life. It must reflect an important aspect of you. Storytelling is basically what I was intending to do on my essay but I now know that an essay like that would get me nowhere.

Thanks for your writing. I received a great amount of help from you just by reading your post.  Good luck. =]