first 6 stanzas of "The Raven" code switched

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Apr 20, 2015
by: esaefong
Raven

On a boring midnight, I thought to myself, tired and weak
Over old and strange books
While I nodded, nearly falling asleep, there came a tapping
Like someone was knocking, knocking at my chamber door
“Its a visitor,” I muttered, “tapping at my chamber door -
Just this and nothing else.”

I clearly remember it was a bitter December;
And each dying ember created ghosts on the floor.
Eagerly I wished for tomorrow;- selfishly I wanted it to borrow
From my books to end the suffering-suffering from the lost Lenore
For the rare and shining virgin whom the angels name Lenore-
Nameless here for evermore.

And the smooth, sad, uncertain sounds of each purple curtain
Trembled me-filled me with unreal horrors I never felt before;
So that now, to calm my heart beat, I stood repeating
“There’s a visitor wanting to enter my chamber door-
Some late visitor wanting to enter my chamber door; -
Just this, and nothing else.”

Presently my soul grew stronger; without questioning
I said, “Sir” or “Ma’am” I am sorry;
Because I was sleeping, and you were gently knocking
And so quietly you came tapping, tapping at my chamber door
That I barely heard you - here I opened the door; -
Just darkness and nothing else

I stood there in the darkness wondering and feeling scared
It was just silence and darkness
So I whispered for “Lenore”
And only heard the echo for “Lenore”
Just this and nothing else

I went back into my chamber, with a burning sensation
Soon I heard the tapping again, but louder
I was sure there was something at my window
I went to check what was there
My heart calmed and I continued to search
It was just the wind and nothing else

Comments

The title should be a little

joly's picture
Submitted by joly on Sun, 2015-04-26 10:15.

The title should be a little different in my opinion, and you should throw in some slang words that the teens use. That way it can sound and look more for the modern time.

I agree with Jocelyn

jforbes's picture
Submitted by jforbes on Sun, 2015-04-26 18:37.

Clearly you understand the poem! Now can you add a little twist of your own?

I understand this poem way

Submitted by esehric on Mon, 2015-04-27 17:08.

I understand this poem way better than the original one. I feel like it used a lot of modern words and made an easier understanding for first time readers! You should spice it up a bit but overall good job man!