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Iced Tea, French Fries, and Center Breast

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Nov 15, 2011
by: kadeemk
iced tea By Rob Ballin a Youth Voices pool photographer on filckr

Iced tea, french fries and center breast
We live in sin yet I'm feeling blessed
What I'm thinking Baby Gal you should take a guess
Nevertheless so it's more that I gain I collect
Money is like my life so something I protect
Now it's 5th Money Music that your looking to select
And I'm all Ready set
Spree Dun Duh Duh ain't weird about the text
Ya Mudda ain't weird about the text
Got it sitting on the desk so
Puff puff pass then it's on to the next
Look to detect what I'm destined to see
Ya flow like a tree I'm just telling it to leave
West Indi Shotta far from an OG
'Cause in effect, that's what made me Spree

Comments

Dear Kadeem:i didnt really

Submitted by leonardh on Wed, 2011-11-16 13:43.

Dear Kadeem:

i didnt really understand your poem towards the middle of the poem but i do however like how u started out, wit the ice tea french fries and chicken

"Puff puff pass then it's on

Submitted by kiseemp on Wed, 2011-11-16 13:49.

"Puff puff pass then it's on to the next" i like this line in you poem because i can relate to it. another line i like in your poem is Ya "flow like a tree I'm just telling it to leave" i like that line because its a good simile.

Deep

Submitted by krystalm on Tue, 2011-11-22 12:40.

When you write your words be deep, your rhymes be on point and express things you would only know for sure. You just give ideas :) -