Mini Saga
"Hi," she says, just silence greets her. She walks into her room, sets her stuff down. The shower does nothing to help with her numbing pain, neither does the music. She feels nothing. What went wrong she wonders as she lays down to rest and cries herself to sleep.
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Gabbie. What is going on in
Gabbie. What is going on in this mini saga of your? Is she talking to her self? I like how you question what went wrong. Thanks for leaving me thinking, cause I am not sure whats going on :) but look forward to you future work!
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Gabbie, this is really depressing. The story is ambiguous but well written. I like that you give us the question of “What went wrong?” It makes me think, what went wrong…Anyway, I hope you continue with this little mini sage of yours, I want to know if the girl is ok. This kind of reminds me of the book I let you borrow, Willow. I look forward to reading more of your posts. Maybe we can chat about your little story in SHOW CHOIR! Anyway, it was well written and you captured enough of my attention to want to know what happened to the girl. I look forward to more posts.
Ah yes erinhc let us talk
Ah yes erinhc let us talk about mini sagas in show choir and also how much we have a hard time following all the steps. I look forward to your comments. They're grrrreat.
G-asian, you did a great job
G-asian, you did a great job of putting emotion and meaning into just fifty words. It really leaves the reader guessing.
Gabbie, your mini saga is
Gabbie, your mini saga is quite interesting, although quite sad. Your personification at the beginning is great, "just the silence greets her." I reallly want to reach out to this girl, she seems to be seriously depresed. I like this mini saga, and just so you are aware yours is 49 words not 50. But still great job, you don't need that extra word to make it a terrific mini saga! The introduction reminded me of "Hi Jesus" "Hi Gabbie" and I got a good hearty chuckle. But anyhow this is good work!