Pilgrims and Indians

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Nov 27, 2013
by: nburton

The pilgrims and indians had fight
But God shined a light on them
Now they get along
and that’s why I wrote this song
Now they are having Thanksgiving together
And Thanksgiving will be forever.

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Dear nburton I am wishing I

Submitted by spineda on Thu, 2014-10-09 01:32.

Dear nburton

I am wishing I read more of your intriguing Poem.

One sentence you wrote that stands out for me is " the pilgrims and Indianans had a fight" post people would explain it more in a understanding way I just wished you've done that.

Another sentence that I past was: "the light shinned on them" what exactly do you mean?

Thanks for your writing ! I look forward to reading more of your passages!

Pilgrims and Indians

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Submitted by cceballos on Sat, 2014-10-11 15:09.

Dear :noah
I am amazed by your post, "pilgrims and indians ," because you did not write noting.
One sentence you wrote that stands out for me is: "The pilgrims and indians had fight" I think this is liked this because you did not write any detail or the reason that they fight for.
Another sentence that I like was: "But God shined a light on the Now they get along" This stood out for me because you're talking how the gods and the light get along know.
I don't agree with you that because you have no proof. One reason I say this isbecause you did not write any detail or the reason that they fight for.
Thanks for your writing. I don’t look forward to seeing what you write next, because i did not like this at all.