Tea

I love your poem
I especially like last line
 

So happy to see someone writing poetry.  I have started a group, the Writers' Well, where you can share your work and invite criticism, aimed at helping you perfect your work.

I really enjoy the sounds of this poem, "slap the kettle", "harmonious symphony", "intended...splendor"

If I may suggest, I feel like there are just too many words in the poem.  In poetry, less is more.  I wonder if you experiemented with removing "the"s and "it"s what might happen?  I fell like this might add excitement to the poem.  I might also try removing some of the adjectives, let some words stand alone.

Thanks for posting this.  I hope my comments are not offensive.  I invite you to take a look at my work and critique as you like.

 I believe that your poetry is an ok length, and that if you were to shorten it that you might want to take out a few parts of the middle paragraphs. Overall, I believe that you used excellent imagery to display this whistling kettle with steam pouring out of it. Do you think that you might want to put more action verbs into the poem so that it is even more vivid? I love how you do not end the poem with one long, prolonged line; instead you condensed the end of your poem so the reader was able to depict the meaning. What I also enjoyed about your poem is that you are not worrying about rhyming, or following a certain kind of meter. Sometimes when poets trying to write in iambic contaminator they unintounally write poetry that is not as satisfying as something that is written in more of a free-verse style.

 Brohannesburg, this poem has some buck-nasty imagery.  "Ear-piercing screech", when I read this I can totally see you making tea.