Comments

1. oh jeeze....tell me you're really not that depressed! lol jk jk jk! i really like "the pain behind the pane" nice. anyways, wonderful job.

   emma at JM, SLC on Tuesday, 09 January 2007, 11:20 CST # |

2. dude thats pretty good... but kinda emo haha. but u should be a writer lol. all of the things iv seen by u are really good.

   adams at JM,SLC on Tuesday, 09 January 2007, 11:22 CST # |

3. This is really good. It's one of those poems that someone would read at a coffee house with a bongo player. "...the rope (beat)...the chain (beat)...that keeps(beat...the paine...behind..the pane.) The flow is good and I like the way you use the two words that sound the same (I forgot what their called). And while we're on the subject of writing, that article in the Bulldog Press was very interesting.

   analises at JM, SLC on Tuesday, 09 January 2007, 11:23 CST # |

4. Wow...Parker!!! This blows my mind. I am not a good writer but you, you are a great writer. I really think you should be a writer. I would definately read your peices. 

   NyakuiyP at JM, SLC on Tuesday, 09 January 2007, 11:25 CST # |

5.  Parker buddy Whats wrong i hope your ok but yeah it rock. it's really good but i hope you know that if something is wrong you can always talk to me and ill listen i will help if you want but yeah cutie so the "pain behind the pane" it's like the pain that you hide you don't want to show to other poeple but you want help. that how i interrpurt it because thats how i used to be veary depressed so thats just how i see it. ok byebye cutie

   aericka at JM, SLC on Tuesday, 09 January 2007, 11:28 CST # |

6. wait i dont get it. what is the pain behind the pane.  It's good but i think you clearify what you're talking about.  It is kinda emo but everything is so it makes sense

   a jolt

   a bolt

   awoken from the dream

   i look

   i glance

   a glean

   from the glass

   Nice job you should submit you poems to litmag or something

   Daves at JM, SLC on Tuesday, 09 January 2007, 11:29 CST # |

7.  i love your poem. its really good, i think its one of the best poems ive ever read. my favorite part is
   

   a view

   a scene

   to see beyond 

   the pouring rain

   a light so close

   but not to touch

   to feel or hold

   it's only cold

    

   this is a really strong poem. keep writing 

   Deyka at ESCHS, NYC on Wednesday, 10 January 2007, 09:43 CST # |

8. hey guys and gals--thanks for the input! i've honestly enternained the idea of becoming a journalist ever since we saw that movie about steven glass, which is about when my article in the Press got published. It's cool to know i've got support for my work, the comments mean a lot!

    

   Parker at JM, SLC on Wednesday, 10 January 2007, 19:39 CST # |

9. I like the imagery, but I'm not really getting the 2-words-per-line structure.
   Maybe you could try combining words and making lines into complete thoughts so it flows a little better. Because I noticed as I was reading it that it was very broken up and jagged. Good thoughts though. Nice job.

   Paris at JM, SLC on Thursday, 25 January 2007, 09:37 CST # |

10. i think that you are a great poet and your poetry is very beautyfull. things are sometimes better written then spoken. i am glad to have heard your poetry! its great!

    MayA on Wednesday, 14 November 2007, 12:48 CST # |